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1．Wherethereisawill,thereisaway
Thewell-knownproverb“Wherethereisawill,thereisaway”haslongbeenacceptedbyallofus.Itismeanttoshowthathoweverchallengingordifficultawayis,astrongwillmayhelpconquerallthedifficultiesandeventuallyleadtosuccess.Ifullyagreewithitanditsimplication,inmyopinion,canbejustifiedinthreerespects.
Firstofall,whatamanthinksinmindoftentransmitsintoone’sbehavior.Asitiswidelyrecongnizedthatthoughtdecidesbehavior,nothingwillbehardtoadeterminedandpersistentperson.Secondly,noonecandenythatconstanteffortbringssuccess,solongasamanwokswithperseveranceandusesarightway，德文翻譯.Lastbutnotleast,confrontingwithenormousdifficultiesorfrustration,onlyamanholdingasteelwillcangetthroughandembarkonanewwaywithapromisingprospect.
Livinginanagewhenthemoderncompetitionbecomesmoreandmorefierce,astrongwillseemmorethannecessary.Withthisawareness,peoplecancopewithwhattheywillencounterinthefuturebetterandconfrontallthechallengesmorecalmlyandconfidently.
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Thewell-knownproverb“Wherethereisawill,thereisaway”haslongbeenacceptedbyallofus.Itismeanttoshowthathoweverchallengingordifficultawayis,astrongwillmayhelpconquerallthedifficultiesandeventuallyleadtosuccess.(這句話寫得非常出色，是你自己寫的嗎？)Ifullyagreewithitanditsimplication,inmyopinion,canbejustifiedinthreerespects.
Firstofall,whatamanbearsinmindoftenturnsintoone’saction.Asitiswidelyrecognizedthatthoughtdecidesbehavior,nothingwillbehardtoadeterminedandpersistentperson.Secondly,noonecandenythatconstanteffortbringssuccess,solongasamanworkswithperseveranceandchoosestherightway.(此句可繼續修改，改得更理想，解決原句不平行的問題，細看：Secondly,constanteffortsalwaysleadtosuccess�solongasapersonstandsfirmandaimshigh,successwillnotbefaraway.)Lastbutnotleast,confrontingwithenormousdifficulties,onlyamanwithanironwillcanpullthroughandembarkonanewwaywithapromisingprospect.(此句也寫得不錯)
Livinginanagewhenthemoderncompetitionbecomesmoreandmoreintense,astrongwillseemsmorethannecessary.Withthisawareness,peoplecancopewithwhattheywillencounterinthefuturebetterandstanduptoconfrontallthechallengesmorecalmlyandconfidently.